Tuesday, November 3, 2009

Its jus not right!!


You are not the dream I chase every night
Not really my prince or charming knight..

Time passed so soon like a flash of light
Blind I was not but had short sight..

Wish I have today is not quite right
Rhymes I pour so here I write..

I hold your hands and see through your sight
Life seems simple with hopes so bright..

You are my dear who showed me love in fight
The one who showed to dream with delight..

Only if I had known you were my light
Instead of maybes would have held you tight..

P.S: started this with a sad note...but ended with a cute smile..thank u:)..
sometimes feelings are jus tat...feel it even if its just not right!!...

28 comments:

SandyCarlson said...

I agree with you about feelings. They do their own thing.

Amity said...

hmmm.. i like it dear, the message, the thought, the rhymes? everything in it!

real or fiction?

have a nice day...:)

Pramoda Meduri said...

i agree dear..

we generally feel sometimes even thy are nt just rght ..:) loved the poem and cuteeeeee pic..:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ SandyCarlson-

yaa:)...thank u dear:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Amity Me-

thank u dear:)..if feelings are true then i guess it is:)...

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Pramoda-

thank u dear:)...yaa this pic reflects my smile!!... he he:)...

Anonymous said...

the picture is soo cute! it tells the story the poem does. love everything!!

Anonymous said...

i like it. honest and nanlike! :)

monorhyme form is nice too! good work!

Creativity said...

Woww :) :) Beautiful Lines Dear :) :) Extremely Very Well Written :) :)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Wana-

thank u dear:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Leo-

thank u dear:)..

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Creativity!-
thank u dear:)..glad u liked it soo much:)

Aparna (Life Takes) said...

sweetly written...

Unknown said...

i love this :)

Chatterbox said...

Nice poem.
The rhymes add to the charm of your wonderful poetry.

Cheers!!

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Aparna -

thank u dear:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ michellehendra-

i'm glad:)...thank u dear

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Chatterbox-

thank u dear:)...

RHYTHM AND RHYME said...

Feelings are funny things, one moment one is feeling sad next the opposite, loved the poem, a pleasure to read.

Yvonne.

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Yvonne.-

thank u dear:)...ya totally agree with u:)...glad u enjoyed it:)

Amias (ljm and liquidplastic) said...

Yes, our feelings will run away with us. Really like the ending.

Anonymous said...

honest and true to form..

you did it again tulip

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Amias -
thank u dear:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Shraddha-

thank u dear:)

Anonymous said...

Wow, this indeed was a super rhyme.Loved the flow and the monorhyme.

Last two lines indeed made me smile..keep smiling Tulip.

Americanising Desi said...

what a pleasurable ride through poetry :D
i m over the moon now!

i m a rhyme person and i could easily keep swaying to this one.

love your poetry always!

Yellow Tulip said...

@ swapnap-

thank u dear:)...keep smiling:)...glad u liked it:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Americanising Desi-

thank u dear:)...n i really enjoy ur say :)...*hugs* glad u enjoyed it:)

 
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