Monday, September 14, 2009

Tears


I wish you rubbed those tears from cheeks
With every drop my soul dies
Nonstop my tears are flowing from weeks

Everything around in no time bleaks
Memories bring liters of cries
I wish you rubbed those tears from cheeks

Ahhw those smiles an enchanted mystiques
Missing your love and all those advise
Nonstop my tears are flowing from weeks

I promise my dear on goddess of Greeks
Neither more secrets nor any more lies
I wish you rubbed those tears from cheeks

My wandering soul, peace it seeks
For your care, it craves yet unwise
Nonstop my tears are flowing from weeks

It is not working, just look into my eyes
Tears they are, not just any lies
I wish you rubbed those tears from cheeks
Nonstop my tears are flowing from weeks

PS: thank u Anu for correcting:)...

PSS: and my special thanks to Leo for helping me to understand this new style:)Villanelle

38 comments:

pinkZz said...

beautiful ..! :)

Anu...:) said...

Very nice...
I am sorry if I am wrong but I think it should be "Nonstop my tears are* flowing *for weeks"

I hope you don't mind me saying that!:)

But really really touching one!

Guria said...

Lovely..! Nice re-use of words gets the exact feel across. :)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ pinkZz-
thank u dear:)..

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Anu.-

thank u dear:)..ya it should be...:)..i'll change:)..thank u:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Guria-

thank u dear:)..glad u liked it..

Vyshu said...

Very well written Dear ..:)

You are brimming with Poetry ..!

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Vyshu-

nothin dear...jus was tryin:)..thank u:)..

Being Pramoda... said...

hey..i love to tell u that the main this i like about u is the way u have been improving since day one.

I loved these lines about tears..:)

keep posting :)

HaRy!! said...

ooo written very beautifully... Luvd those teary lines...!..cya around gal!

Creativity!! said...

Fabulous :D :) Extremely Loved It :D :)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Pramoda-

thank u dear:)..hope to learn more with each moment:)..thank u dear:)...

Yellow Tulip said...

@ HaRy-

thank u dear:)...glad u liked it:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Creativity-

thank u dear:)...happy to know u like it tat much:)

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

An excellent poem , well written.

Yvonne.

Ria said...

that was so touching....made me teary eyed!

Yellow Tulip said...

@Yvonne-
thank u dear:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Ria-

thank u dear:)..glad u liked it:)

The Solitary Writer said...

wonderful YT

hw nicely u have expressed....nice

Yellow Tulip said...

@ The Solitary Writer-

thank u dear:)...

Americanising Desi said...

awww honey!
i love what you write but i keep wonder why so much sadness?

hugs!
i wish you'd find the true one who'd not give u any tears at all :)

Shruti said...

Hey girl thanks for dropping by my blog and following me!
Ahhhh!!
Nice poem yaar! You have used right words to get the exact feel!

Yellow Tulip said...

@ AD-

most of my poems r depressing cos i let my depression out like this dear:)..its not like i 'm always sad but when i'm sad it comes out as poems!!:)...

and thank u dear:)..hope i find the right person(soul mate):)he he:)

hugs:)...

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Shruti -

thank u dear:)...i loved ur works too:)...

freelancer said...

super awesome
one of my fav forms of poetry

keep it coming.
we both should sit and rhyme sometimes

~*~ Jal Pari ~*~ said...

Simply awesome. Loved each and every word. :)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ freelancer-
thank u dear:)..sure dude:)...wod love tat:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Jal Pari-

thank u dear:)...glad u liked it:)

Ash....! said...

Nice one...

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Ash-
thank u:)

angel said...

nice one swweetie.

Yellow Tulip said...

@ angel -
thank u sweetie:)

Leo said...

my pleasure to share what i know :)

u take up all forms with such ease.. beautiful it is! :)

Vinz said...

Sad but beautifully penned..!!

rimz said...

just lovely...felt a bit nostalgic as it created a sense of de ja vu...:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@leo-

thank u dear:)...hope to learn more:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ Vinz-

thank u dear:)...welcome:)..hope u enjoyed my blog:)

Yellow Tulip said...

@ rimz-

thank u ...but this is my first in this style..

 
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