Shadows hover so dark around
Of fear hunting like wild bloodhound
Danger lurking in every bend
Sly trickster he tried to befriend
Here I’m now with mind confound
How I let him forge through my guards
Was I reckless with no regards?
My eyes haunted now looks so pale
Shadows hover
Will ever these fears let me free?
Will ever again love I see
Will ever his thirst be quenched?
With tears my soul is all drenched
With hope I now will end my plea
Shadows hover
46 comments:
I could sense the sadness in your heart, a wonderful poem, and so good to read. You will in time be free from this pain, each day is a new day and with hope you will achieve freedom . Good luck.
Yvonne.
You write fab poetry! I loved the last stanza :D
Aww...You just described the pain and fear so nicely! :)
Loved it...specially the last 3 lines!
Beautiful!
@ Yvonne-
thank u dear:)...
@ rosh-
thank u dear:)...glad u liked it:)
@ Anu-
thank u dear...:)i'm glad u liked it:)
Deceit is painful. You capture it well here. Thanks.
wow.. how beautifully the pain is described.. :) i just loved it..
Fabulous Dear :D Fantastic :) :) You Have Very Well Described The Pain Of Love :D :)
@ SandyCarlson-
thank u dear:)
@ pinkZz-
thank u dear:)
@ Creativity-
thank u dear:)...
Hey..the last stanza was superbly done..soo touching and the pic was fantastic :)
keep it up ;)
I like those last two haunting words!
Haunting. It stays in mind...
inside, outside, which side
Please don't forget to post your creative works at Monday Poetry Train Revisited too each Monday morning!
@ Pramoda-
thank u dear:)
@ Linda -
thank u dear:)...glad u liked it:)
@ gautami-
thank u dear:)...glad u liked it:)...welcome to my blog:)..enjoy ur stay:)
Wow! Great poem tulip!
So expressive...I loved every word of it.
@ Sugar Cube-
thank u dear:)..glad u liked it:)
how i let him forge through my gaurds?
boy o boy that is the line.
THE LINE!
i have something to share with you :)
dont get bored ok :)
love is like a lightbulb in an empty room. it has the chance to go out, and when it does, we freeze up. we walk with eyes closed, finding a way out of the darkness, to bring light back once again.
but sometimes we don’t want to suffer the pain of bumping into anything, or getting hurt on our way out, so some of us stand still. we decide not to escape it, and our eyes get used to being open but seeing nothing at all.
we are sorta waiting endlessly hoping that someone will find us, and we stand in fear, perfectly still until it happens. sigh
keep bleeding, keep bleeding in love
*sigh*
this is what really happens
wonderful and haunting poem.
AD-
soo true dear...:(..*sigh*...somehow we find those memories we shared in that light to hold us on even in the darkness...n somehow we get soo used to darkness with those memories we jus live entire life hopin for someone to rescue yet not want to be rescued....those were the days my frien:)...when u still have that light..its better to forget all negativity n hope n expectations and jus make sweet memories..lots of them.n god forbid but if the light goes we can survive with those memories...hope i make sense:)..i know its seems we prefer darkness to others but only we know wat it feels..
@ freelancer-
hey not always dear...:)..cheer up dont give up ur hopes yet
@ Tammie Lee-
thank u dear:)...glad u liked it:)
very well described....why is it that pain looks so good in the form of poetry!?
@ Ria -
thank u dear..n tat u should tell dear:)..i really dont know:)..i guess i enjoy the pain while writing poem n write soo:)..its beautiful i guess!!..he he..i dont know:)
I see beauty in the pain. Thats how you write. :)
Simply beautiful!!
you've been crowned
http://2short2sweet.blogspot.com/2009/09/ooh-my-blog-is-crowned.html
thru yur guards!! boy, that line was awesome!! Deceit is indeed a pain in the a!! and no better way to be expressive other than poetry!! cya..
HaRy
Oh...very well described Dear ...:)
@ Jal Pari-
thank u dear:)
@ AD-
thank u dear:)..wow...this is jus wow...:)...
@ HaRy-
thank u dear:)...
@ Vyshu -
thank u dear:)
i second Rosh... u write magnificent poetry! :)
@ leo:)-
thank u dear:).jus trying:)...
Lovely work - haunting words...
@ Tumblewords-
thank u dear:)
You can express yourself poetically so well. Am so poetically challenged. Tell me the secret gal, how do you come up with such excellent lines post after post.
@ Shas-
thank u dear:)...hmmm secret is:)..lots of encouragement, admiring followers, lovely comments:)...hmmm thank u:)...soo noo secret dear:)..i like to try different styles:)...love poetry:)...
very nice sweetie,...
@ sis-
thank u sis:)
Hello. I was so taken by your name Yellow Tulip. I can't remember if I have been to your site before. I have been away for some time.
Loved your poem. The striking image of a women in red followed by a very powerful images that flow nicely one in to another.Well done my friend.
love-Melanie-bhd
@ Melanie-
thank u dear glad u liked it:)...welcome back:)..hope to see u more:)..
thank u dear:)...really happy to know u enjoyed ur read:)
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